NaNoWriMo: Day 2
Word Count: 8,024
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A shriek split the air.
The burlap slipped in Joel’s fingers, and he grabbed it before it fell to the ground. The soldiers on either side looked around, searching.
The scream came again, louder and more urgent. Joel dropped the bag and spun to face the canal, eyes racing along the edge. He could have sworn there had been two children running by the water.
Now there was one.
He lunged forward, slamming into one of the soldiers full-force. The man fell back, thrown off balance. Frantic hands reached out to grab his arms.
“There’s someone in the water!” he shouted, pulling away.
He could feel his feet pounding on the dirt, hear the wild cries from behind. Pursuit or rescue?
“Stop! I’ll shoot!”
Joel’s feet skidded ten yards from the edge. Something was churning beneath the muddy water, and a flailing arm broke the surface. Throwing up his hands, Joel turned around.
“I’m here. Get her out!”
One of the guards grabbed his elbow, and another shoved the tip of a bayonet against his chest. Joel twisted around—Terrence was at the water’s edge, reaching for the girl’s hand.
“Jump in, you fool—she’s too far out!” he cried.
Terrence pulled back. “I can’t swim…”
Anger coursed through Joel’s veins. Wrenching his right arm free, he swung his fist into the soldier’s jaw and dove for the water. He didn’t reach it. The butt of a rifle struck him across the shoulder blades, and he hit the ground on his stomach. Dirt stung his eyes. He choked, reaching blindly for the water.
He couldn’t hear the splashing anymore.
Someone had bent his arm at the elbow and was forcing it up toward his shoulder. “Get off!” he screamed, his voice sounding hoarse and unnatural. “She’s drowning!”
Voices were shouting from the direction of the street, and footsteps raced toward the canal. Somewhere a child was crying.
The water had gone still and silent.
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benjc91 on 03 Nov 2009 at 5:43 am #
Inspiring.
Can’t WAIT to read the rest!!
Taylor on 03 Nov 2009 at 11:47 am #
Oh my word, that is great! You are doing an awesome job, I’d love to read more.
God Bless You,
Taylor
Miss Eyebright on 03 Nov 2009 at 3:51 pm #
*gasps for two reasons*
1. Beth left a comment on my blog!!!
2. I will die if I can’t read your book when you’re done with it! That bit is so incredibly AWESOME that I can not wait to read more!
PaulH on 03 Nov 2009 at 4:02 pm #
Bad soldiers, bad.
Cherise on 03 Nov 2009 at 4:50 pm #
Oh my goodness!!! *gapes* Beth, that is amazing!! How utterly heart-wrenching!!
For the second day of NaNoWriMo, you are doing AWESOME!!!
Laura on 03 Nov 2009 at 4:51 pm #
*cries* Aw, that is so sad! The poor girl! *glares at the soldiers*
Beth, you are amazing. Keep up the great work! *hugs*
Christina H on 03 Nov 2009 at 5:56 pm #
That is so… depressing. And incredibly well-written. But depressing none the less. And well-written none the less. My feelings are in conflict.
Beth on 03 Nov 2009 at 6:08 pm #
Sometimes, reality is depressing. (I’m not nearly creative enough to come up with stuff on my own, anyway.)
Anyway, thanks for all the kind words, y’all. It bears mentioning that the other 7,500-some words don’t even live up to this standard, and that’s not saying much.
Amy on 03 Nov 2009 at 7:21 pm #
No fair! What an awful place to stop!!! You did just a great job on it!
Ness on 03 Nov 2009 at 8:11 pm #
good job Beth!Your off to a great start
Poor kid dies a cruel death due to what I’ll guess are confederate soldiers… Well what can I say? It’s well written.

Mine is so bad so far I dare not post any of it
Mine starts with a scream too… Is that like “One stormy night”…?
your doing awesome! ~Ness
A Messenger of Christ on 04 Nov 2009 at 3:07 am #
WOW…..:’( So sad
But I will assume that the girl gets swallowed by a whale and spat out for some good Christian people to take care of.
….There that makes me fell better.
JoyH on 07 Nov 2009 at 5:52 pm #
Oh, I’ve GOT to read the rest!
Great job, Beth!